I started this site with flash fiction reviews, and I haven’t done one in way too long! I’m starting this again as a weekly post – one short review of a recently published piece of flash fiction.
I will choose pieces based on what I can get out of them as a amateur writer. This usually means that I feel they are very good works, but sometimes I will review ones that don’t work so well and try to figure out why not.
Today’s review –
(Also check out her blog post about the story)
I chose this piece mainly because of the two opening paragraphs. The author sets the mood of the piece perfectly, capturing the feel of a man who has just lost everything. I really felt the main character’s depression, and understood why he had no qualms about accepting the incredible offer he’s given. I also like the setup of how he gets this offer – no magical genie, angel, or other cliche – just a stranger who offers him help when his day is going absolutely rotten.
I also thought this story struck a decent balance between showing and telling – the reader is treated to the results of Micheal’s do-over of his life, with only enough exposition to move the story along.
I would have liked to know more about the stranger who offers Micheal the chance, and the police officer who was working with him. What exactly do they get out of this? If Micheal’s soul is the payment, why did the stranger tell Micheal that the favor was free?
Anyway, it was a very entertaining story and I’m glad to have found it. I gave it 4 / 5 stars.